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Some people think that students study more efficiently in groups, others argues that studying separately is better. Discuss the advantages of both ways and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, the developing technology provides students
multiple
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 ways to
study
 efficiently. Some people think that studying in groups is more efficiently, others
argues
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 that studying separately is better. From my perspective, the efficiency of
student
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a student
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 depends on the student himself mainly. In groups,
we'll
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 be easier to find our motivation and get a favourable atmosphere to
study
concentratly
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concentrating
concentrate
concentrated
. But the precondition is to find a group which is fit
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 yourself.
Otherwise
, there will be nothing but harm. Studying
seperately
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separately
 provides us
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 chance to take over own decisions about the time and place to
study
, and
also
 improve
your
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our
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 ability of self-
study
. But most time, we need more self-discipline. Where there is a will, there is a way. As we often say. I think only
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 the longing for
knowldge
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knowledge
 with perseverance, can we truly improve the
study
 efficiency no matter in groups or
sperately
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separately
.
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