You are bored in your current job but you enjoy working for your company. You think you would be happier if you moved to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be moved to a position in another department explain how you feel about your current position and your career say why you think changing your job would be good for you and the company
Respected HR director,
I am writing
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Yours sincerely
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task response
Your letter addresses all parts of the task effectively, providing clear reasons for requesting a transfer and explaining the benefits for both you and the company. However, ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
You have a good logical structure overall, moving from your current situation to your reasons for the request, and concluding with a summary. However, try to make transitions between the points a bit smoother for enhanced readability.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is appropriate and respectful, which is essential for formal communication.
task achievement
You effectively explain your personal situation and how it affects your work, providing a genuine reason for the transfer request.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.