You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a lette to this friend. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy college explain why getting a good job is a good idea for him/her suggest types job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Sam, Hope you and your family are doing well. I received your letter yesterday and was amazed that you consider me in a valuable decision to
chose
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whether to go
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college or getting a
job
is a better idea or not. I am writing
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letter to assist you
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worthy
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for your future.
As
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I know you are not a bookworm but the study related to
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profession needs to study each and every concept in detail which is not beneficial for you.
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, the college which you choose far from your house and you will waste approximately 4 hours
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commuting from one place to another. I think
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a
job
is a better
decison
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decision
for you. I know you are not financially strong and unable to pay for your course. After the death of your father, you are the one person in your family to support them financially and you have to fulfill your responsibilities towards them. You are already an experienced guy by
working
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in distinct locations. So, you will get a
job
easily. I recommend you
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try to find
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in
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centres or in hotels as you have
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experience in these places. You will apply for
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reception
in hotels or nurse in any hospital. I hope you will get a
job
definitely and
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an
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handsome money until
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your next
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letter. I think you will like my suggestions. Hope to hear back from you soon! Warm Regards, Sally.
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coherence and cohesion
Consider splitting long paragraphs into smaller ones to maintain a single idea focus and to improve readability.
task response
Provide a more detailed explanation about why you think the suggested jobs are suitable based on your friend's skills and interests.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a warm and friendly tone throughout, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
complete response
The reasons for not enjoying college are clear and well-linked to the friend's personal situation.
greeting and closing
The letter begins with a strong introduction that clearly explains the purpose of writing.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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