Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion

Teaching a child at
home
is considered best for a child's
development
in some peoples' opinion while others think that it is important for them to go to
school
. There are both advantages
for
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either
options
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. I strongly believe that kids need to be sent to
school
for their better nurturing. On one hand, it is believed that educating
children
at
home
is better for
child's
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development
.
children
at
home
feel a safe environment and can focus better on their
development
. Parents can decide on what kind of education can be given to
children
instead
of following the
age old
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techniques taught at
school
.
Home schooling
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improves the individuality among
children
which
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inturn
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helps them in building their future.
On the other hand
, sending
offsprings
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to
school
has its own benefits. In
this
competitive
world
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kids need to be taught about the competition from their tender ages itself to succeed in their career. At schools, there are vast sources of knowledge providing options available to kids, so that they can learn and improve their skills. Schools have teachers as prime assets who can guide the
children
in
right
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direction for their
development
. To conclude,
eventhough
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even though
both
option
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have
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their own advantages, I strongly feel that sending
children
to
school
is more important than educating them at
home
as the former
have
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more advantages over the
later
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.
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