The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous governments expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

The maps depict the main changes that will take place in the location where the school is situated from 2004 to 2024. Generally, it can be seen that
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transportation

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facilities
facility

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and educational buildings will be expanded at the expense of removing green spaces over the whole period of 20 years. With regard to
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sports

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facilities, the sports field which lied in the north of the area will be rebuilt to reduce its size and relocated to the middle of the site. Considering educational facilities, the
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third
this

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school
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building

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will
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construct
be constructed

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to the east of
second
educational
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building

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, where sport field used to be. It is worth noting that, the path which connected the main entrance to the
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former

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sports field, will be made smaller to let
first
and
second
educational
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buildings
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get connected
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through

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construction. Considering transportation, the trees in the northeast of the area will be cleared to make way for the
second
parking lot.
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, the trees in the middle of the site are removed making way for
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of the road which links the main road to the
second
parking lot.
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