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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous governments expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

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The maps depict the main changes that will take place in the location where the school is situated from 2004 to 2024. Generally, it can be seen that
transporation
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transportation
factilites
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facilities
facility
 and educational buildings will be expanded at the expense of removing green spaces over the whole period of 20 years. With regard to
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 facilities, the sports field which lied in the north of the area will be rebuilt to reduce its size and relocated to the middle of the site. Considering educational facilities, the
thirs
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third
this
 school
builidng
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building
 will
constructed
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 to the east of
second
 educational
builidng
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building
, where sport field used to be. It is worth noting that, the path which connected the main entrance to the
forme
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former
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 sports field, will be made smaller to let
first
 and
second
 educational
builings
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buildings
building
 get connected
thorugh
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through
 the
addtional
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additional
 construction. Considering transportation, the trees in the northeast of the area will be cleared to make way for the
second
 parking lot.
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, the trees in the middle of the site are removed making way for
construction
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 of the road which links the main road to the
second
 parking lot.
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