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Nowadays, some universities offer graduate students’ skills that assist them to find employment, but some people believe that the main function of university should be to access knowledge for its sake. What’s your opinion?

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In contemporary days some
universities
 provide a chance
to
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 graduate
students
 to find their workplace.
While
 people think that employment is important, others believe that the primary function of
universities
 is to open access to knowledge. In my opinion, schooling should be designed to prepare
students
 for real life, rather than underlining the academic aspect only. There can be no doubt that the main purpose of providing
university
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 education is to help young contenders to start and pursue their future careers.
However
,
universities
 in the present time are not giving access to enough information which is necessary for
students
.
Students
 after they
graduated
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 only have knowledge of the particular sphere, but they
unaware
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 of where they should start.
Therefore
,
universities
 should place their emphasis on vocational training which is directly correlated to a specific trade, occupation or vocation. Particularly it is true when jobs that are well-paid require the best use of technical
skills
. Aside from these
skills
,
universities
 should assume the responsibility to enhance and diversify the
skills
 of the
students
 which can be used during their life. There are numerous
skills
 that might play a vital role in
students
’
life
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such
 as recognizing people’s feelings, setting attainable goals,
developing
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and developing
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 problem-solving strategies. University can make it a reality.
For example
, by organizing a variety of physical activities
students
 can enhance their abilities of team-working and leadership. These
skills
, when taken together, will assist
to apply
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 the knowledge dexterously. As depicted above, the primary goal of
universities
 is to prepare
students
 for well-paid workplaces. During the education, extracurricular activities should be held in an effort to make
students
 productive members of society
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task response
You have addressed the topic, but you need to clearly express your opinion and provide a clear stance on the main functions of universities.
coherence and cohesion
You have provided a logical structure and supported the main points effectively. However, your introduction and conclusion could be more developed to provide a stronger framework for your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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