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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Nowadays government is spending a large amount of
money
 on
transportation
 infrastructures. It is always debatable that
weather
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whether
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 government should spend more
money
 on railways or roads.
This
 essay will discuss why there should be
balance
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a balance
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 between both the modes of
transportation
 along with
suitable
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a suitable
the suitable
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 conclusion. There are several reasons that railways should be more developed than
roda
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road
transportation
. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 is, it is
more
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a more
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 reliable and convenient source of
transportation
. It is evident that railway
transportation
 is comparatively
cheper
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cheaper
 than
road
transportation
.its affordable price making it more popular.
Moreover
, if one is travelling to
long distance
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, it takes less
time
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compare
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 to other
transportation
 as it has special routes.
Additionally
,
factor
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a factor
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 of traffic congestion could be eliminated.
As a result
, people can save
their
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time
 and
money
 at the same
time
.
Hence
 it is better to invest more
money
on
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 it.
On the other hand
,
roda
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road
rode
transportation
 is one of the oldest and popular methods of
transportation
.
Road
transportation
syestem
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system
 is ubiquitous and easily accessible. It is irrefutable that most of the people
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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 using
road
transportation
everyday
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. The reason behind
is
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this is
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 that
,
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 falk can use different types of vehicles for
road
transportation
 like they can ride motorcycles, cars, cycles even
by
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 foot. So,
road
transportation
not
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does not
did not
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 need any special infrastructure to access it like railways. On
the
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top of that,
road
transportation
 demands less maintenance than
other mode
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another mode
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 of
transportation
.
For instance
, according to a survey of BBC India, 75% of
time
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the time
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 people are using
road
transportation
 when they are going out. It shows that it is
paramount
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a paramount
the paramount
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 mode of
transportation
. I believe that for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of any country, it is mandatory that government spend
equal
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an equal
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 amount of funding for both
the
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modes of
transportation
 as they have their own advantage. It can be concluded that
development
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the development
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 of both modes of
transportation
 is equally important.
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