Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors and teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Different

professsions

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professions

professionals

have different roles in societies,

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of which,at times , is classified on the basis of what the person is banking from it. Its is generally argued that degree based occupation, namely, doctors and teachers should be better financially rewarded than those in the

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illustrious

illustrations

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careers of sports and entertainment. While the sports and entertainment personalities deserve their status and earnings, I believe that we need to compensate the

professionals

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workers better.

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with, the career path of film or

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is quite tedious as they have to go through many challenges and competitions to reach the pinnacle or even to get some limelight.

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, the competition is more fierce as the

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is numbered with only

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positions available.

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, there are only five teams in Formula one with each team having only 3 professional drivers. In tennis, football or even in movies

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are merely

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people who are able to do well.

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, you might see

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of doctors, and teachers in

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society.

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, we need to see the true value of these professionals

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respect to

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society. Doctors and teachers

contibute

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contribute

immensely

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and are vital for the well being of humanity altogether. In

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, not only they go through the

rigourous

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rigorous

training where they sacrifice many years to equip themselves with these capabilities, but

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they carry the huge financial burden

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incurred with

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fees and not working for many years. One should consider the fact that

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time span to become

doctor

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a doctor

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is around 8- 10 years.

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, because of the time value expenses and services, these

professional

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are more eligible for better monetary

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. In conclusion,

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the sports and entertainment personalities

shuold

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should

be highly rewarded for their accomplishments, other professionals should

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be paid for their contributions

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similar level.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Professional workers
Societal contribution
Scarcity
Market forces
Consumer demand
Role models
Economic impact
Revenue generation
Fair compensation
Social equity
Intrinsic rewards
Job satisfaction
Media rights
Merchandise sales
Public figures

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