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Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town. Do the advantages of learning a new language in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Learning languages has been a trend in the
last
 decade. Many people believe in travelling to
foreign
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country
 to learn
new
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language
 whereas some believe that
language
 can be learnt in their city itself. I believe that foreign languages learnt by travelling to that nation is advantageous as compared to one's learnt in their hometown and will explain in the below paragraphs. Globalisation has
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changed the world
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 we live in. There is an increased interaction among people and their culture
thus
 creating
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 opportunity for many to study new languages. Many migrate to these international countries to learn their native
language
 to help them improve their relationship with the locals.
Thus
 they are able to learn faster and
also
 the accent and grammar of the native nation. For
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 Indians who have migrated to
english
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 speaking countries have
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 hold of English and
also
 the accent of the native
country
.
Thus
 moving to
foreign
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country
 is beneficial. At the same time, it is easier to learn
new
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language
 in our hometown without unnecessary travelling. With the advancement in technology, most of the
language
 learning skills can be found on
internet
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.
Furthermore
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 we can interact with native speakers online without the need of moving to
a different countries
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 and the hassles of staying abroad. Many students who aspire to go abroad learn
english
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 in their city or take
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 of digitalisation. In conclusion, though it is possible to learn a new
language
 in the city we live
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 by going abroad we will be able to understand, converse in a better way with confidence.
Thus
 there is a significant advantage of learning
new
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language
 in the native
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic immersion
  • Cultural integration
  • International network
  • Conversational proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Pedagogical differences
  • Culture shock
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