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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We live in a world in which everyone is judgmental to the extent that
one
 often makes inconsequential remarks in regards to things that do not affect
one
 in the least bit,
such
 as if other
people
 are driving a Lamborgini or if they are carrying a Hermes bag. It seems as though old fashioned values
such
 as honour, generosity, and trust do not amount to much in today's condemnatory world. Apropos of the statement, I am in part in accordance with it. It is inarguable that a staggering number of
people
 only consider how their connection can bring advantages to them when befriending
someone
.
For instance
,
one
 might think twice before making friends with
someone
 who is kind but impoverished, as there is no benefit
that is
 likely to stem from the connection. On the flip side, ingratiating with
someone
 who displays ostentatious wealth might be more auspicious for
one
 in the future.
Similarly
,
one
 from a wealthy family might feel hesitant to befriend
someone
 who is struggling to make ends meet, seeing as the latter is not on the same level as
one
 in terms of social
status
.
Also
, there is no guarantee that
one
 will not be on the receiving end of bullying if
one
 befriends
someone
 of a lower
status
. Case in point, kids from my school will not let Jaycee hear the end of it because she is friends with Elaine, a driver's daughter, notwithstanding the fact that Elaine is trustworthy and dependable. In contrast, I
also
 believe that it is unreasonable to stereotype the whole society based on the behaviour and way of thinking of some
people
. Like the aforementioned case in which Jaycee is willing to befriend Elaine despite being bullied, it shows that it is possible for some
people
 to value trust and generosity over social
status
. To sum up, while it is commonplace for
people
 to hold a higher value of material possessions and social
status
 in
this
 overcritical world, there are
also
people
 who value old fashioned values more and they are not to be overlooked.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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