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Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? reasons: cheap transport , jobs , safety police, cars benefits: explore things : self confidence , learn new lenguage, new lifestyle

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It is an undeniable fact that travelling has become a prominent part of our life. As compared to the golden days, now
people
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 are travelling more for many reasons, which eventually brings some merits and demerits for the whole society
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 for travellers
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. In
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 essay, I will delve deep into the reasons behind
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 commute and after that will present some benefits of it. To commence with, many
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 travel to a number of different places for their daily routine work
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 as job, meeting relatives and to buy food. One of the most important reasons is,
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that now
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 there are cheap ways available to commute like buses, trains and sharing rides
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 as
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an
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uber
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 pool.
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, to avoid traffic, now many
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 in my country India, travel by train which is a cheap and faster way of commute.
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, nowadays brand new cars are available at low EMI rates so anyone can easily buy them and use them to reach their destination.
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, travelling brings some advantages to the travellers.
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, it has been seen that it increases self-confidence.
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, daily commute includes meeting a lot of unknown persons, which
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 us to learn how to talk and whom to trust.
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, It includes exploring new places and learning new languages. To illustrate my point
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, backpackers travel to many countries to explore new lifestyles and cultures, where they
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 learn new languages to communicate with the
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. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, as cities are growing day by day, travelling has become a habit for the individual. As an outcome, now
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 are using their personal vehicles more and not paying attention to the pollution it brings to society.
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 the government to keep the environment safe. The government should impose some strict rules to promote public transport.
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