Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime level?

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In recent years, the misdemeanour rate has increased, and most spread to youngsters. I believe there are two main problems, but even some practical ways we can take.
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recurrence , followed by a reasoned conclusion. Perhaps the major factor here is the average education level and nurture of children.
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, in Mongolia, many parents care about the job more than their children, which impacts the family atmosphere. A
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recidivism – in other ,words we have to use positive ways to the custodial period which juvenile jail,
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as cognitive - behavioural therapy, proper support and guidance, meditation etc. Turning to possible solutions, the biggest step would be to improve family relationships and psychological maturity. Of course, almost all adolescents have been educated in school or university. The teacher and parents should work together and changing a family atmosphere may require parents to change their fundamental views of life, attitudes toward other people, and feelings.
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, psychological treatment within the prison walls may help reduce the recidivism rate. Because when a young person had released from the detention centre, they need to reintegrate into society by attending school or university, or finding a job. The training and psychological treatments help them prepare for
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. Generally, the main problems of youth crime can be addressed through a combination of positive family relationships, targeted maturity and psychological treatments.
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