Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Throughout all our lives, it is evident that will have good and bearable moments as we will have difficult and bad moments.
As a result
of that reality or idea, people tend to reflect and adopt certain points of view.
For example
, a lot of people think that it is just a bad or unlucky moment and that they should accept it, they think that “after the storm comes the rainbow”. Alternatively, there is another point of view that basically is says that we should
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destiny and work hard to improve our situation. Both ideas are correct, and they adapt
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the person, but both of them can have advantages and disadvantages. It is known that we can not control the events we experience, due to
this
, a lot of people think that we just need to live the life we have and accept all the things that happen,
this
thought would be useful for some situations, especially when we do not have anything to do, in that way we avoid getting stressed by situations that are out of our hands, perhaps we just need to try to deal with the problems one by one, waiting for a good moment.
However
, I think that
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could go against you in some moments,
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that I mean that in some situations having that
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is not the best because maybe you get used to it, and you do not reconsider or reflect
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your situation,
in other words
, the problem you are having could become something humdrum, and that would be a serious problem.
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the other hand we have the idea which says that we always need to
fight
and work in order to improve our conditions, which is not a bad thought, but as I have said before, it could be self-defeating,
in other words
, if you try to
fight
with something that you do not control,
then
you are not going to achieve anything and you will only be getting stressed and maybe depressed. Is evident that
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you
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work hard for better
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conditions you will achieve something but try to make
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that you can reach. As a
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we can say that both thoughts are right, but you have to know when to think in one way, and when to think in another because if you
fight
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,
then
, you will not be able to achieve a change, and if you let that others take advantage of you, you will be making yourself a bad path in your life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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