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Wild animals have no place in the21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It goes beyond doubt that wild
animals
 are creatures of nature ,and they add diversity
in
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 our environment. Some people reckon that it is
a
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useless to protect these
animals
 in
this
 modern era. I
srongly
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strongly
 disagree with
this
 given statement. The most plausible reason is that wild
animals
 help to maintain
ecological
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 cycle. Some
animals
 are on the verge of
get
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 extinction and they can be only preserved by taking care of
it
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them
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. If these
animals
 get disappear
then
,
ecological
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 circle will be disturbed completely.
In addition
, many
animals
 are being used in zoos for
an
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entertainment or knowledge
purpose
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 by numerous people for earning their livelihood , and for surviving in
this
fast paced
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 world.
Hence
, it leads to
deterimental
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detrimental
consequeces
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consequences
 from many
perspective
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such
 as social, environmental as well as
economical
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.
Furthermore
,
usually
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 advancement in
medical
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 sector is brought by performing new
medicines
 tests on
animals
 before sending
medicines
 for a saling purpose to humans. Ultimately, they
helps
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 to invent new
medicines
 to deal with unexpected health ailments.
For example
, simulation
experiment
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 cannot take place of animal testing. So, it is a
preesing
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pressing
 need to preserve them. In conclusion, there is an utmost necessity to protect wild
animals
 for maintaining ecological path and
medicines
 testing.
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