Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

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like to stay there so you don'
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have the disposition to do your
job
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or to stay good with your boss, so you will be stressed all the days of your life because you are doing Some thing that you don'
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like, so if You don'
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stay in your comfort zone you try and improve
Such
situations you will have two options, one that you can explore new
job
oferts and know new people, and If you are a dedicated person you will find your dream
job
and if you are lucky they pay
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good money for
do
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your things and the other option, we have to be realistits, the other option is that you will fail on the things that you do, so thats a hard dicition that you have to choose in your lives because It is a thing that you will do all the days on your
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, so you have to choose all the correct option, and you have to be a dedicated person, and you have tostudy the platform that you want, so you will be happy.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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