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Government should spend more money on education that on recreation and sports. Di you agree or disagree

#government #money #education #recreation #sports
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Dear Sir/ Madam I am writing to inform you that the
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 you were supposed to send me via mail, was missed in the sent envelope. Yesterday, I have received a mail from the TD bank with the title
of
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containing my new
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 in it. After I opened it, I realized that
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 it has contained a declaration letter, mentioning my
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 information. There was no sign of it. I believe it is better to
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 the
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 as there is a possibility of either getting lost or stolen.
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, you would eliminate the chance of me getting robbed. I suggest that you would better
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send me a new
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 as well. I was wondering when it would be possible for me to get
the
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 new
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. Since I was planning to go on a trip with my family, it would be better for me to have it prior to the scheduled trip of ours on the 16th of May. If you could send me on any day before that exact day, it would be great.
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, I will be able to have it while I am travelling. Thanks for your help and consideration. Yours faithfully
Jhon
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John
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 Smith
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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