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Some teachers argue that students learn more effectively when they study in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. What is your opinion?

#teachers #students #study #groups
Education plays an important role in each and every individual's life and for
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 teachers are greatly responsible. The tutors come across many
students
 in their life and have a debatable issue among them whether as, the
students
 can learn better in groups rather than studying individually. Every person has a different approach towards it, I opine, studying in groups is a better way. On the
one
 hand, every learner has
different
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 strategy to grasp the
subject
,
however
, it is not necessary that every person
study
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 in
same
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the same
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 fashion that others follow. According to
me
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, studying in
congregation
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a congregation
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 helps
students
 to retain the
subject
 for
more
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longer as they will learn it in
more
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 practical manner. It is not
benefical
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beneficial
 for a student to just sit alone at home and
mugup
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mug up
 the
subject
, the proper understanding of
subject
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the subject
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 is important. Sometimes
students
 leave the particular topic due to lack of comprehension, whereas, if they learn in
group
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a group
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one
 or the other member can help. The discussion which takes place support you to remember the lesson for the exam or in life practically.
On the other hand
, group studies can
also
 lead to various distractions
for instance
, if
one
 student gets a phone call or gets busy
in
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 something,
rest
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 of them can be affected.
In addition
 to
this
, young
students
 might get diverted easily by ending up
to
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chit-chat or play games if they gather at
one
 place.
However
, if the group of
students
 plan and study sincerely they can learn the topic effectively.
Furthermore
, learning along with others can assist in socializing and
also
 teaches to communicate with
one
 another. To conclude, every student has a different method of studying and cannot be compelled to follow the same pattern. Albeit, all the
students
 must try to study in groups as much possible as it will really help in understanding and hold on
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 concept constructively.
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