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Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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In the modern era, the government keeps increasing the
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 of
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. Some
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 think
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 decision is in favour of elderly
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, while others believe
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 should not decide on the basis of
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. It should be decided on the basis of mental and physical ability. I completely agree that the
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age
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 should be decided on the basis of some criteria and
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. The main reason why
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 believe
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age
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 should decide on physical ability.
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 and foremost,
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 is simply because the older
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people
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 will suffer from many diseases and not physically stronger than before.
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, a Job-like security guard requires a physically strong person who can protect their resident from burglary and any miss happenings. A
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 rule impacts society if elderly workers are not able to perform their job. Clearly, signing off from duty should be decided based on the
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 and physical strength of a worker. Along with
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, in many jobs, youngsters got appointed as a manager of an aged worker. As elderly workers are not as mentally stronger as their young managers, they face many difficulties in
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 and go through mental illness.
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, In IT jobs, the young generation is up to date with new technologies and current trends, and they expect their workers to do the same despite their
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. In the long run, old aged
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 do not cope up fastly with the current trends and suffer from mental illness.
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 along with
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people
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’s ability to learn something new
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 decreases and they can not be able to compete with youngsters. In conclusion,
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 some
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 believe setting the universal
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 is beneficial for all elderly
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, it impacts different working groups where physical and mental strength is a must. Indeed, some criteria should be required to decide
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age
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 based on the
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 and worker's health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • unfair
  • pension
  • occupation
  • workers
  • physically demanding jobs
  • professions
  • stress
  • responsibility
  • long years of service
  • excellent contributions
  • eligibility
  • individual circumstances
  • case-by-case basis
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