Some people believe that the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe that there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people think that the goal of tertiary education is to provide graduates with better jobs while

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feel that

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university

education has far-reaching benefits for both individuals and society. In my opinion,

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from university is worth more than a better-paid job On one hand, several reasons point out why university education support students in finding more satisfactory jobs.

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because most of the

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that learned in tertiary focuses on one specific subject.

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, when studying finance, economics students understand how currency work, what is the definition of finance and bigger concepts contributing to macro-finance.

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, I agree that

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that we learned in

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study have both

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for

themseft

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themself

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and society.

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, things learned from university can be used in

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situations. Back to the example about finance study, not only we gain more

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knowledge

about it, we can use these grasp to control our daily

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of money or invest in

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the business

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. If used correctly,

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of money will be saved or even more, they will

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automatically

produce money for themselves.

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knowledge

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can be a subject to talk about with friends or family when hanging out,

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proof to them that you are a well-educated person. For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that

univerity

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university

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much more benefits than just getting a

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jobs.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

231 words

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Some people believe that the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe that there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many cities and urban areas around the world, crime is increasing. What is the cause of this? How can governments help to prevent the crimes?

Some people say History is oneof the most important school subjets. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activities of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You have recently read a book about a city you know well and found some incorrect information. Write a letter to the author. ▪️Yell him/her of the incorrect information ▪️Give him/her the correct information Explain why they should correct it.