Some people think that the government should provide unemployed people with a free mobile phone and free access to the internet to help them find jobs.

In the area of
internet
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the internet
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of things which make makes
Internet
be the most important thing to do many activities, several
people
believe
government
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the government
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could give free mobile
phone
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phones
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and
internet
to unemployed society to get them jobs. I don’t think mobile
phone
and
internet
is necessary
eough
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enough
to
people
who do not get their
job
yet.
However
,
this
idea is not bad, it can
motivates
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motivate
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jobless
people
to work harder for getting a
job
.
Firstly
, giving a free
phone
and
internet
access
is not essential.
Besides
,
Governments
will prepare
much
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a lot of
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money to give the
facilites
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facilities
.
People
who can survive by their own
access
and ability will
worker
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work
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harder in the workplace
that
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than
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they got.
In addition
, the responsibility of the society who makes the wish comes true is precious.
For example
, an employee who
get
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gets
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his
job
by their own efforts will truly appreciate the time he already spent
for
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apply
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getting the
job
. So, he
do
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does
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his
job
very well
,
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apply
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and get the promotion faster.
However
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,However
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people
who helped by the
governments
will feel motivated to reach the
job
that they want to. Several
people
in the country who helped by the
governments
to get
access
on
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to
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the free
internet
and get
smartphone
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smartphones
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could have a strong wish and venture to reach their dream.
For example
,
People
who
is
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are
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belived
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believed
by the
governments
to get
an
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apply
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access
in
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to
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the
internet
will keep them motivated and appreciate every
Internet
usage
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user
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to get their
job
.
Moreover
,
this
society usually
work
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works
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twice harder to
seacrh
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search
a vacancy for not being jobless anymore. To sum up, either
people
who
wa
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was
given free
access
to the
internet
and
smart
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smartphone
show examples
phone
for getting a
job
or
people
who
seacrh
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search
the vacancy by their own effort have a huge venture change their life to get a
job
.
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