Some people think that the government should provide unemployed people with a free mobile phone and free access to the internet to help them find jobs.

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internet
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of things which make makes
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be the most important thing to do many activities, several
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believe
government
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the government
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could give free mobile
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phone
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phones
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and
internet
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to unemployed society to get them jobs. I don’t think mobile
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and
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is necessary
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enough
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who do not get their
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yet.
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,
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idea is not bad, it can
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jobless
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to work harder for getting a
job
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.
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, giving a free
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and
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access
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is not essential.
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,
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will prepare
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money to give the
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facilities
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who can survive by their own
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and ability will
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harder in the workplace
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than
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they got.
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, the responsibility of the society who makes the wish comes true is precious.
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, an employee who
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his
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by their own efforts will truly appreciate the time he already spent
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getting the
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. So, he
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his
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very well
,
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apply
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and get the promotion faster.
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people
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who helped by the
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will feel motivated to reach the
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that they want to. Several
people
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in the country who helped by the
governments
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to get
access
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on
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the free
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and get
smartphone
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smartphones
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could have a strong wish and venture to reach their dream.
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who
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belived
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believed
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to get
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access
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in
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to
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the
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will keep them motivated and appreciate every
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usage
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to get their
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.
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,
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society usually
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twice harder to
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search
a vacancy for not being jobless anymore. To sum up, either
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who
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was
given free
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to the
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and
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smartphone
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phone
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for getting a
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or
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who
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search
the vacancy by their own effort have a huge venture change their life to get a
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.
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