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Band 4

some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members in society. Others, However believes that school are the place to learn it.

Several people argue that children have to be taught by their parents
about
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 become good citizens,
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, some societies believe that a good place to learn about
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 in the academy. I think both the argument is a good idea, not only parents that have to teach the kid, but
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 school has that responsibility too in a different way.
firstly
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, fathers need to teach their teenagers how to be active in society and give benefits to them. a mother who always
give
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lessons about
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 a great society always
teach
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teaches
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 their adolescent
a
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carefully and
give
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 attention seriously.
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, since the age of 3, the mother always
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 their baby to say thanks, please,
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, with
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examples and do it repeatedly.
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,
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 about them in the home is not enough to raise their children to become a good nation.
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, an institution is the best place to help kids face the world and be better citizens. in school ,
usually
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juvenile
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 spend a lot of their time in a day, and that situation could be the chance
of
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 students to learn more about attitude.
For
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instead
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, adolescents have to communicate with other students about
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task
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tasks
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, homework, or just playing games,
sport
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, and others.
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, in the academy, youngsters must communicate with teachers which
mean
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 older than them. and they have to know how to figure out
communicate
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 with the older community.
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, both parents and institutions have
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impacts
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impact
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 on children how to be
a
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good
person
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people
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.
in
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 the home
teenager
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teenagers
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 need to interact with their family and be good people who love the family. and in
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school
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they learn how to communicate with other societies and get a connection and create a network between them.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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