Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future. Others think they should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the growing number of
people
have provoked
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vigorous arguments on education meaning. Whether should we concentrate on the practical
skills
so that we can be guaranteed to have a high quality of life or should we just need to master the
theory
of
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and professional knowledge. To an extent, I think
this
topic is not a black and white problem and it is not noticeable wrong only if we choose either of them. A considerable amount of
people
argues that enrolling in university is closer to
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success and which means
to
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getting
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a decent
job
in the future by grasping the specific
skills
in the near future. Comparing with
the
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theory
or academic studying,
people
prefer to put their energy
on
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practical
skills
. Especially for some kind of
job
, like doctors
which
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need yearly experience and tons of experimental practices in
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test
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. Only familiar with
theory
or
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knowledge but lack of practical
skills
would lead to tragedy to some families when they operate on patients. Over and above that the public who equal the excellent
job
skills
as the same with the successful life through a high paying
job
. And
that is
why some of them convey the aiming
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the validity
studying
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in the university rather than academic learning. Others
who
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think the public should focus on academic study only because of the following reasons. On the one hand, due to the social structure which
are
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quite different
with
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that of from the past.
People
can only get finite food by contributing their
labor
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on the farm and afraid of disasters by the nature influence in the agricultural society in the past.
However
, nowadays,
people
can
ignorant
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the environmental control factors and grow crops in the vertical farms or indoor by the contemporary techniques by the scientists who are studying advanced
skills
by the advanced academic essays or basic on some results from the other scholars who get Nobel prize in
this
field. The
theory
and advanced academic knowledge
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essential to the public in the fast-paced society. Some practical jobs would not be needed and demolished in recent years.
On the other hand
, advanced academic result in science, physics or some outbreaks on space exploration
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a new weapon between with the countries which are striving for
competing
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the dominance right
in finite
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resources in the future. In conclusion, specific
skills
is
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quite important for the public who want to get a nice
job
, whereas,
the
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advanced academic studying
also
is essential to the scholars and countries to
continuing
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to compete for the
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situation in the world.
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