Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education and that the govern should make it free for all students no matter what financial condition they have . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education
is the fundamental
rights
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right
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of everyone . The
education
ratio
increasing day by day .It is
debatable
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issue that government should provide free college
education
with all kinds of facilities.Here, I , strongly agree with
this
statement and
i
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will be mentioning my point in the upcoming paragraph. The
first
and foremost reason to support my ideology is that every person of
nation
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the nation
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has a basic
rights
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right
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to gain
university
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education
without any cost.
Moreover
, people are paying
tax
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to the government and
ruling
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party should satisfy their needs
such
as higher
education
and so on.
For example
, many western countries , provide free
education
to their residence and
this
idea lead to
scholar
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ratio
.
In addition
, everyone has not
same
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a same
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capacity that they pay the
education
fees and for them it is
boon
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.
Moreover
, when
nation
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a nation
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provide
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free
education
it is
also
beneficial for
whole
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nation
that academic development increase and
unemployment
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the unemployment
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ratio
will decrease . It is
win-win
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situation for both .
For instance
, ruling party help
those student
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that student
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who are poor so richest man
get
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angry they might be fought.
Therefore
, the unity might be collapsed .
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, for better development and smooth functioning of country people should have knowledge and
education
so government should focus on that.
For example
, in the USA there is only 6% unemployment
ratio
which is very neglatable compare to other
nation
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. Having gone through the matter in some
detailed
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it can be concluded that , ruling party make sure to give free
education
and
ministry
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the ministry
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should focus more on
education
than financial condition .I hope
this
trend is
conductive
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conducive
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for young ones.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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  • In general

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