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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#schools #government
Schools
 are an essential component for the
all-around
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 development of children;
however
, is it necessary for the government to invest in private
schools
. Even though governmental
institutes
 need a decent amount of
money
 to operate, I find the notion to fund private academies completely flawed since they do not charge students with high
fees
 but they
also
 gain sufficient profit by charging for extra-curricular activities. Most of the government-owned
schools
 are deficient in budget.
This
 is because these
schools
 are backward in terms of infrastructure which requires
money
 for renovation, and the authorities charge very little
fees
 from students.
This
 in turn makes it necessary for the government to provide funds as they are unable to generate enough income and
thus
, it is required to keep
institutes
 functional. Contrarily, non-governmental
institutes
 charge high
fees
 for children. To elaborate more, private
schools
 provide amenities along with surplus facilities at the cost of extra
money
 which is willingly paid by most of the parents for the future of their kids. As evidence, there is a large difference between the
fees
 structure of private and public
schools
. Had these private
schools
 not been charged
this
 much fee, there could be a need to provide funds.
However
, unnecessary
money
 is already being paid to them.
In addition
 to high tuition
fees
, extra
money
 is charged for various other activities in these private
schools
.
Firstly
, parents are insisted to pay admission
fees
 to secure a seat as there are limited slots available.
Secondly
, students are forced to buy books and uniforms from school only which provides these
schools
 extra profit.
Furthermore
, there are made to pay examination
fees
, welfare amounts, and much more. To recapitulate, two main points are mentioned in
this
 essay: reasons to provide funds to public
schools
, and reasons not to invest in private
institutes
.
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