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Band 2.5

DOES IT HELP STUDENTS IF PARENTS PAY FOR THEIR UNIVERSITY EDUCATION?

#students #parents #university #education
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The support of
parents
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 in the university education is important for the motivation that they give to continue the studies, but
in
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particular
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 is relevant their support of bear the expensive cost of university. It is the reason why a lot of students decide to
work
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 and it has advantages and disadvantages. An advantage
is certainly connect
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 to the money that can be used to pay
their
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 studies and help
parents
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. They can
also
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 pay their personal expenses and so money permits them to become economically independent from
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parents
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their parents
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.
An
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 disadvantage is surely the
time
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. If students
work
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 while studying, it can distract them and influence negatively
they
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their
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 studies, because they are more stressed and less focused and they may not graduate on
time
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.
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Moreover
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 they will not have
time
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 to dedicate to hobbies or leisure activities. But some people when they haven’t enough
time
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, they organize better their
time
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.
Anyway
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 it changes from person to person and it depends on many factors like the course of study, the ability to control stress, the type of
work
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. But I think that if
parents
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 have no problem
to pay
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paying
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 the whole expenses of university and students don’t have to
work
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, they are
more quiet
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quieter
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 and study is easier because they have
less
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fewer
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 worries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional support
  • Financial implications
  • Self-reliance
  • Personal growth
  • Social networking
  • Professional contacts
  • Household chores
  • Independence
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Burden
  • Engage
  • Proximity
  • Conducive
  • Insulated
  • Opportunities
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