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Many people believe that education standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it

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Nowadays, with the rapid development in the
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 some of society think the rate of
education
 has increased, especially in literacy and numeracy. In my view, I believe that
education
 became less productive than before. In
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 I
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 describe some
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 issue and the solutions.
Firstly
, life became more developed because of technology.
The technology
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 leads people to be dependents and if there want any answers just looking for it by using the Internet.
Also
, video games one of the reasons to make
education
 increased because children spend much time play, which would be lead to a lazy brain.
On the other hand
, to solve the educational issue. We must find new ways to encourage the teacher and student to be more interested in
education
such
 as, prepare mathematics competitions to help students to think.
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, find
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 to
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 self learns by using technology.
For example
, download apps for science or calculate.
Finally
, recherche homework helps to cognitive. In conclusion, even with all the changes around the world, we must support new ways to develop
education
 to be more effective.
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