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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #opportunity #study #part #courses #countries
In recent years,
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 of
students
 that pursue their education in other countries
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 increased. While I agree that studying abroad
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 a lot of positive impacts, I believe that there are
also
 negative impacts.
Firstly
,
by
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going overseas to
study
 can help
students
 to improve
the
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language
 skills. If the
students
study
at
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the
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 country that doesn’t speak their native
language
, they need to learn a new
language
 to be able to communicate with other people in daily life. By learning
new
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language
,
students
 not only can increase their vocabulary but
also
 help them to adapt
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 the new culture. Other than that,
language
 skills help them to be more confident to make friends with the local
students
. Making friends with local
students
 make them comfortable to share the problems that they faced in the foreign country.
On the other hand
,
students
 who are studying abroad may face a high challenge due to the cost of living
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the
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foreign countries is really high. For
students
 who are facing financial problems, they need to do a
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 job to be able to survive there.
As a result
,
students
 may feel tired and do not attend classes at the university.
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 they may fail the exam and may be expelled from the university. In
conclusion
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 I support
study
 abroad is good, but there are challenges that
students
 may face that can lead to negative impacts.
Therefore
,
students
 need to think carefully about the consequences that they will encounter before deciding to
study
 abroad.
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