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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, there have been a lot of changes in medical care due to technology. Because of
advancement
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 in the medical field, there has been a rise in the
rate
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 of life expectancy and
people
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 are living for a longer span. I believe that despite
of
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having some benefits,
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 trend has more drawbacks which cannot be overlooked. To commence with, there are some demerits of
people
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 living longer.
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 and foremost, a higher expectancy
rate
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 means that there will be
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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 since the death
rate
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 will
be low
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below
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.
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 can create
burden
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 on the government as they will not have
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of basic necessities to provide to its residents.
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, In India, due to
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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,
people
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 do not receive basic requirements
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 as food, clothing shelter and education;
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, it leads to a higher poverty
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 of a country.
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,
people
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 can struggle to get a job because of high competition,
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 of
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 unemployment rises.
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, it
also
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 creates excess expense of pension on the government and private companies.
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, there might be some advantages of
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 trend which can be beneficial to the economy and business. The primary advantage is that the nation can have
better
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 productive workforce as
people
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 not often fall sick;
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result
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 employees will take few holidays and increase efficiency at
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the workplace
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.
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 may help
economy
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 to boost to some extent. Another possible merit is that experienced
people
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 can make better decisions at work, so the more experienced staff will be present the better growth of the business is expected.
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, sometimes it can be advantageous. In conclusion, mortality
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rate
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rates
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 have reduced in
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last
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 few years due to
advancement
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advancements
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 in
the
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medical facilities.
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 has positive effects to some extent but there are more disadvantages of
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 trend which causes more problems
such
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 as
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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, unemployment and so on.
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