Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines instead. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development.

In the contemporary era, the technology trend
increseing
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increasing
day by day. The
people
like
use
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this
technology because
its
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easy for work. There are prodigious things used to be done in the
home
by
hand
but now some
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person
done by machines. There are numerous advantages of
this
topic along with certain disadvantages as "every rose comes with
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thorns
" I will present these in the upcoming paragraph. The
first
and foremost point which comes to my mind
people
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. They don't want
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time
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making and cooking in
old
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the old
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style. In India
people
still used to be done in the
home
by
hand
because they do not have machines. There
is
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one main
advantages
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that
is save
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time
.
People
can save
their
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time
. If they
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will
make
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hand
it
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time
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other
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hand
it will make by machine they can
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with in
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short
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time
However
, there is
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dictum " even moon has its dark side"
likewise
, there are some
disadvanages
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disadvantages
of
this
topic. There are many
kind
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kinds
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of machines which one is not good for using in
home
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the home
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.
People
should not use in
home
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the home
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because there are many side
effect
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effects
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.
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,
people
use
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the microwave
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microwave
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in
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home
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the home
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. There are many lights which are harmful
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person
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health
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inside
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the oven. In conclusion, it can be said that as "every coin has two sides" in the same way
this
topic has
also
both sides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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