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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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it is certainly true that In recent years, the number of
students
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 that pursue/pursuing their education in other countries has increased tremendously .These
students
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 are able to either do their entire studies abroad or only the final part of their degrees before graduating
in
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 these foreign universities. I totally agree that there are not only advantages of
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 but
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 some drawbacks. One of the advantages of going overseas to
study
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 is that it can help
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 to improve their
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 skills.
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, if the
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study
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 in a
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 where the people do not speak the
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' native
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,
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these
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 may need to learn a new
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,
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, the
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 of the people in the other
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 , in order to be able to communicate with the people in that
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 on a daily basis/in their daily life. By learning the new
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, the
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 can not only increase their vocabulary but
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 adapt to the new culture. Other than that,
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 skills help them to be more confident in making friends with the local
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. Making friends with local
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 enables them to be more comfortable
to share
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 the problems that they face in
the
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 foreign
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.
On the other hand
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,
students
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 who are studying abroad may face some challenges due to the cost of living in
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foreign countries being really high. For
students
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 who are facing financial problems, they need to do a
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 job to be able to survive there.
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,
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 may feel tired and not attend classes at the university.
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, they may fail the exam and may be expelled from the university. In conclusion, I support
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 abroad good,
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 there are some positive consequences to studying abroad, there are
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 challenges that
students
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 may face that can lead to negative impacts.
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,
students
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 need to think carefully about the consequences that they will encounter before deciding to
study
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 abroad.

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