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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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it is certainly true that In recent years, the number of
students
 that pursue/pursuing their education in other countries has increased tremendously .These
students
 are able to either do their entire studies abroad or only the final part of their degrees before graduating
in
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 these foreign universities. I totally agree that there are not only advantages of
this
 but
also
 some drawbacks. One of the advantages of going overseas to
study
 is that it can help
students
 to improve their
language
 skills.
For example
, if the
students
study
 in a
country
 where the people do not speak the
students
' native
language
,
they
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these
students
 may need to learn a new
language
,
that is
, the
language
 of the people in the other
country
 , in order to be able to communicate with the people in that
country
 on a daily basis/in their daily life. By learning the new
language
, the
students
 can not only increase their vocabulary but
also
 adapt to the new culture. Other than that,
language
 skills help them to be more confident in making friends with the local
students
. Making friends with local
students
 enables them to be more comfortable
to share
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 the problems that they face in
the
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 foreign
country
.
On the other hand
,
students
 who are studying abroad may face some challenges due to the cost of living in
the
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foreign countries being really high. For
students
 who are facing financial problems, they need to do a
part time
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 job to be able to survive there.
As a result
,
students
 may feel tired and not attend classes at the university.
Consequently
, they may fail the exam and may be expelled from the university. In conclusion, I support
study
 abroad good,
Although
 there are some positive consequences to studying abroad, there are
also
 challenges that
students
 may face that can lead to negative impacts.
Therefore
,
students
 need to think carefully about the consequences that they will encounter before deciding to
study
 abroad.
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