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Many people believe that religion is not a good thing, others say it is. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

#people #religion #points
When we talk about
religion
, it is necessary to have a definition. The following definition from Wikipedia provides a good overview of the many dimensions of
religion
:
Religion
 is a collection of cultural systems, belief systems, and worldviews that relate humanity to spirituality and, sometimes, to moral values. Many religions have narratives, symbols, traditions and sacred histories that are intended to give meaning to life or to explain the origin of life or the universe. They tend to derive morality, ethics, religious laws or a preferred lifestyle from their ideas about the cosmos and human nature. All of us believe in something, like gods, gods or ourselves. Having a
religion
 for many people is important and necessary, like belonging to a community, having support or guidance in the bad times, a structure, and holding ceremonies. When our beliefs allow us to become a better person, be happy, free, make decisions by ourselves and be at peace. Being able to decide what to eat or which to get married to is good. Religions are not good when does not have limits, others are hurt, holding society, in many cases the rules have more than 1000 years ago,
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