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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e books rather than paper books. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend ?

#years #people #e #books #paper #trend
E-
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books
 are becoming more popular every day in our lives, and paper
books
 are reducing
as a result
.
People
 believe that it is somehow good for reading. while others strongly oppose
this
 saying. The
advantages
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for
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this
 trend is that
books
 are cheap and can be accessed anywhere. But, it will make
people
's eyes more vulnerable and will
also
 affect
the
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brain functions.
Firstly
, online
books
 and magazines are less expensive on the internet. As there are discounts offered on various sites, which make reading materials more price friendly.
Furthermore
,
people
 can download e-
books
 anywhere and at any time globally. There are plenty of good servers and virtual sites that allow citizens to read 24/7 internationally.
For example
, Amazon is one of the biggest
provider
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 of reading textbooks in the world.
Therefore
, if readers want to read science fiction or
story
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books
then
 they can download and read with a single click. On the opposing side, it is harmful
for
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 the human eyes.
This
 is to say, because Residents spend massive hours reading e-
books
infront
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in front
 of the screen,
this
make
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 their eyes more blurry than before.
Moreover
, it
also
 affects the reader's brain health and comprehension power. As a consequence,
people
 have focusing issues and are not able to perform at their maximum ability.
For instance
, I myself had the disability to focus
continusely
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continuously
in
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 my college studies.
This
 happened because I used my phone every day for hours without any breaks. In conclusion, virtual
books
 permittee
people
 to read for cheap prices and can be obtained within the flexibility of individuals.
However
, it affects the eye organs and the brain's ability to perform.
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