Many developing countries place a lot of importance on tourism. Why is this? Do you think that this is a positive or negative development?

Many growing
nations
give more
priorities
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priority

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to
the
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tourism
.
This
is done because many
countries
want to show their
beauty
to the entire world.
This
essay agrees that it is
the
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a

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positive development for
nations
. Several
countries
around the globe tend to represent their
beauty
to other
countries
.
This
is because nature and infrastructure
tells
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tell

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a lot about the
countries
image to
the
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foreigners.
Also
, the ratings are done globally about every nation and
is
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are

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placed in the categories of best or worst
nations
in terms of their Environmental
beauty
.
For instance
, Dubai being a
well developed
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well-developed

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country has Burj khalifa and palm island where the tourists come and experience it. Due to its infrastructure and
tourism
places
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,places

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it comes in the top
countries
in terms of naturality on the earth.
Secondly
, it
also
supports the economies of various
nations
.
This
is to say
,
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because
a
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massive numbers of foreigners go to see the countrysides of various international
nations
.
As a result
, they bring a large amount of cash and money with them
that is
spent on the home
countries
. Due to which the economies are boosted and
nations
become more advanced and developed.
For example
, Switzerland is popular for its mountains and greenery.
Therefore
, it primarily depends on its
tourism
and not on other things. In conclusion, there are numerous plus points or positive development of backing
tourism
by
countries
. mainly, global
countries
do
this
to demonstrate their
beauty
, and It is
also
done to increase the financial condition and inflow of more foreign currency in the host
nations
.
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