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Many developing countries place a lot of importance on tourism. Why is this? Do you think that this is a positive or negative development?

Many growing
nations
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 give more
priorities
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tourism
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.
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 is done because many
countries
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 want to show their
beauty
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 to the entire world.
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 positive development for
nations
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. Several
countries
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 around the globe tend to represent their
beauty
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 to other
countries
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.
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 is because nature and infrastructure
tells
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 a lot about the
countries
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foreigners.
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, the ratings are done globally about every nation and
is
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 placed in the categories of best or worst
nations
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 in terms of their Environmental
beauty
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.
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, Dubai being a
well developed
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 country has Burj khalifa and palm island where the tourists come and experience it. Due to its infrastructure and
tourism
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places
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 it comes in the top
countries
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 in terms of naturality on the earth.
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, it
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 supports the economies of various
nations
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.
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 is to say
,
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massive numbers of foreigners go to see the countrysides of various international
nations
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.
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, they bring a large amount of cash and money with them
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 spent on the home
countries
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. Due to which the economies are boosted and
nations
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 become more advanced and developed.
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, Switzerland is popular for its mountains and greenery.
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, it primarily depends on its
tourism
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 and not on other things. In conclusion, there are numerous plus points or positive development of backing
tourism
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 by
countries
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. mainly, global
countries
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 do
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 to demonstrate their
beauty
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, and It is
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 done to increase the financial condition and inflow of more foreign currency in the host
nations
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