Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Happiness
is undoubtedly
utmost
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important thing in everyone's
life
. Definition of
happiness
can be different in respect to
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the situation
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situation
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situations
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in which a person is there currently.
Happiness
is a difficult term to define because
it's
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its
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meaning for everybody
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change for various reasons and existing parameters.
For
instance
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for one person with a simple rough rustic
life
with
large
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a large
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family around makes him or
her
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she
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contended whereas
same
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the same
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situation with another person can be frustrating . Satisfied patients can make
surgeon
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surgeons
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happy whereas some surgeons may not like their job at all. There can be many factors
which
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that
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are crucial for utmost
happiness
and contentment.
Firstly
it is satisfaction in our
life
which can be in any field like our job or any business which we do , if we will love our job
than
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only it can give us
happiness
otherwise
we will work
inheartidly
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heartily
heartedly
and
secondly
positive approach towards our
life
no what situation arrives in front of us.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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