Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your won opinion.

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There are conflicting views with regards to whether it is more essential to have an enjoyable
job
or to have one that pays
high
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salary
.
One
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the other hand, those who support the view that a good
salary
is more important
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have their valid reasons.
Firstly
, life is certainly much easier for those who have a lot of
money
; they are able to purchase whatever they want and enjoy a higher quality of life in terms of home, education, material comforts and even medical facilities. They do not have to worry constantly about whether they can afford something or not.
In addition
, earning a good
salary
make it easier to be healthier because good food as well as
exercising
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facilities
such
as a gym are affordable. Their families may be able to go on expensive holidays even though they may have to
work
longer hours and put up with unpleasant working conditions for the
money
they earn.
On the other hand
, those who feel that enjoying one’s
job
is more important than a high
salary
have their own strong arguments. They feel that it is vital to want to go
work
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every day because of the pleasure their
job
gives them. A pleasure
job
makes a positive difference to whether they are motivated to continue improving their skills, excelling in their
job
and getting promoted. They would not mind
to stay
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longer hours at
work
because of the conducive working conditions, the good relationship they enjoy with their employer and colleagues and the enjoyable nature of their
work
itself.
Also
, many people find that they can manage with less
money
while focusing on a better life by taking a
job
they truly enjoy/take pleasure in. Many spend a lot of
money
on unnecessary things. In my opinion, it is more important to have a
job
that is
enjoyable because most people need less
money
than they think because may waste a lot on buying
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they do not need.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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