The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree.
With the advent of modern computerization and
technology
everything which we desire is now only a click away. The rate of online purchasing is growing Add a comma
,technology
in
Change preposition
at
sooo
fast Correct your spelling
so
pace
that it may lead to Correct article usage
a pace
complete
shutting of local markets and Add an article
the complete
open air
shops. I partially agree with the above statement and will give my opinion in Add a hyphen
open-air
following
paragraphs. On the one hand, online shopping provides large benefits as it is less cumbersome n more comfortable. Due to globalization , society is flooded with large international and national brands to choose from and that Correct article usage
the following
also
in reasonable pricing. People can easily scroll any item on their respective laptops and smartphones and order them hassle
free.and Add the particle
to hassle
moreover
easy returns and exchange policy
add more to its comfort zone. Fix the agreement mistake
policies
For
example
Amazon Is Add a comma
,example
very
famous fashion brand in India offering Correct article usage
a very
all
Correct determiner usage
a
range
from ethnic wear to kitchenware and Fix the agreement mistake
ranges
person
can easily order and return without any problems. Correct article usage
a person
On the other hand
, handicrafts offered by local artisans and shops are unmatchable. Folks get to see more options while visiting the market and buy perfect size from them which is not possible online and furthermore
electronics and hardware are Correct your spelling
buoyed
buyed
by people only after proper checking and scrutiny by Correct your spelling
bought
customer
and they don't rely online Add an article
the customer
a customer
for
shopping Change the preposition
on
upon
these kind
of appliances. In Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
conclusion
I would like to say that though online shopping is Add a comma
,conclusion
growning
in peaks Correct your spelling
growing
but
it will completely discard local market will not be possibleRemove the conjunction
apply
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite