while people flood into big cities to seek jobs and happy life, there is a tendency for people to move out. What problems do big cities have? Give reasons for your answer from your own knowledge and experience.

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With the socio-economic development, more and more
people
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have poured into
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city
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the city
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center
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to hunt for jobs as well as to have a better
life
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. Some others have an inclination of leaving the
city
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to find other appropriate places to live. To my mind, there are two main reasons to be explained for
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issue.
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of all,
although
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city
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life
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has been considered as the best place to search for a stable job with
high
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salary,
people
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encounter the risk of crimes.
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issue has become more common in all
cities
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in the world. Due to being crowded with
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, violent crimes appear and rise
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as robbing, stealing and murdering. Obviously,
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is an insurmountable challenge for those who would like to live in
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.
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,
people
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live
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in
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to feel unsafe and absolutely terrified
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criminal activities. Old
people
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usually have an option to live in
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the countryside
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instead
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of living in
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. Another reason is that
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live in
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; they
also
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cope with
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the contaminated
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environment
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. A large amount of emission has been emitted from motorcycles, cars and industrial zones. These detrimental chemicals
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as carbon dioxide and lead can cause emphysema. What is more, pollution from water, noise and rubbish
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regarded as the most concerned malady in
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life
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. As
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result, a large number of
people
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who live in
cities
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suffered from asthma, stroke and lung cancer.
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, in recent research, the Vietnamese government indicated that about 21
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of
people
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who live in
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have these above diseases.
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, moving out
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cities
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of cities
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becomes an urgent decision of many
people
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. It seems to me that the reasons for moving out
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cities
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of cities
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to
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be due to a wave of crime and harsh pollution. Young
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flood into
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to hunt for jobs and make money. Elderly
people
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leave
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life
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because of keeping health and safe
life
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. It is likely to be better to live in
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the countryside
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than to live in
cities
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Housing demand
  • Public services
  • Cost of living
  • Pollution levels
  • Air quality
  • Traffic congestion
  • Commuting
  • Crime rates
  • Income disparity
  • Infrastructure
  • Public transport
  • Green spaces
  • Urban heat
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