while people flood into big cities to seek jobs and happy life, there is a tendency for people to move out. What problems do big cities have? Give reasons for your answer from your own knowledge and experience.

With the socio-economic development, more and more
people
have poured into
city
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center
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to hunt for jobs as well as to have a better
life
. Some others have an inclination of leaving the
city
to find other appropriate places to live. To my mind, there are two main reasons to be explained for
this
issue.
First
of all,
although
city
life
has been considered as the best place to search for a stable job with
high
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salary,
people
encounter the risk of crimes.
This
issue has become more common in all
cities
in the world. Due to being crowded with
people
, violent crimes appear and rise
such
as robbing, stealing and murdering. Obviously,
this
is an insurmountable challenge for those who would like to live in
cities
.
Therefore
,
people
live
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in
cities
to feel unsafe and absolutely terrified
with
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criminal activities. Old
people
usually have an option to live in
countryside
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instead
of living in
cities
. Another reason is that
people
live in
cities
; they
also
cope with
contaminated
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environment
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. A large amount of emission has been emitted from motorcycles, cars and industrial zones. These detrimental chemicals
such
as carbon dioxide and lead can cause emphysema. What is more, pollution from water, noise and rubbish
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regarded as the most concerned malady in
city
life
. As
the
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result, a large number of
people
who live in
cities
suffered from asthma, stroke and lung cancer.
For example
, in recent research, the Vietnamese government indicated that about 21
percent
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of
people
who live in
cities
have these above diseases.
Therefore
, moving out
cities
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becomes an urgent decision of many
people
. It seems to me that the reasons for moving out
cities
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be due to a wave of crime and harsh pollution. Young
people
flood into
cities
to hunt for jobs and make money. Elderly
people
leave
city
life
because of keeping health and safe
life
. It is likely to be better to live in
countryside
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than to live in
cities
.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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