It is said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some youngers are interested to get married early and some don’t want to get marry because they want
married
after career satisfaction. But, wedlock before 30 is not well good for both Change the verb form
to be married
marrying
child
as well as their family. Because they are not much able to take responsibility. I think parents can not force their children to get Use synonyms
engage
before their Change the form of the verb
engaged
interest
.
Fix the agreement mistake
interests
To begin
with, in Indian culture married before 30 Linking Words
age
is good for both Use synonyms
society
as well as children. As per old Change to a plural noun
societies
age
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
people
early marriage Add a comma
,people
have
more benefits like no health issues because Change the verb form
has
age
group below thirty has high fertility to get birth to Use synonyms
Use synonyms
child
and Add an article
a child
the child
people
get free early from their responsibility. Use synonyms
For instance
, now in fast life Linking Words
people
eat fast food due to Use synonyms
these reason
they suffer from fertility problem.
Change the determiner
this reason
these reasons
Secondly
, Linking Words
wedding
before 30 Correct article usage
a wedding
have
some side effects sinceChange the verb form
has
,
children are not satisfied Remove the comma
apply
about
their carrier as well as they can not achieve their dream job in between 30 years. Change the preposition
with
For example
, due to lack of education Linking Words
people
got Use synonyms
poor
hike in their job and that’s why they are financially weak before thirty Add an article
a poor
age
Use synonyms
also
they cant borrow needful for their family.
Linking Words
Last
but not least, Linking Words
the
another advantage is that Remove the article
apply
sometime
Replace the word
sometimes
Use synonyms
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
are
not mentally as well as physically prepare Change the verb form
is
for
Change preposition
to
choose
their partner or staying with Change the verb form
choosing
partner
so in that Add an article
a partner
case
they face helplessness and severe depression problem. Add a comma
,case
For example
, Linking Words
love
marriage below 30 Correct article usage
a love
age
is still not working for Use synonyms
long
time owing to less experience about Change the article
a long
people
and due to immaturity poor adjustment as well as understanding between both.
Use synonyms
Lastly
, I think marriage is Linking Words
most
important stage Correct article usage
the most
of
young Change preposition
for
people
so don’t force them. Parents give them Use synonyms
Add an article
a suggestion
suggestion
for Fix the agreement mistake
suggestions
Add an article
the wedding
a wedding
wedding
. but, Fix the agreement mistake
weddings
final
decision is Add an article
the final
depend
on Change the verb form
to depend
depending
Use synonyms
child
. And after 30 they are independent to take their own decision.Add an article
the child
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