It is said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some youngers are interested to get married early and some don’t want to get marry because they want
married
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to be married
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after career satisfaction. But, wedlock before 30 is not well good for both
child
as well as their family. Because they are not much able to take responsibility. I think parents can not force their children to get
engage
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before their
interest
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interests
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.
To begin
with, in Indian culture married before 30
age
is good for both
society
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societies
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as well as children. As per old
age
people
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,people
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early marriage
have
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has
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more benefits like no health issues because
age
group below thirty has high fertility to get birth to
child
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a child
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and
people
get free early from their responsibility.
For instance
, now in fast life
people
eat fast food due to
these reason
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this reason
these reasons
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they suffer from fertility problem.
Secondly
,
wedding
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a wedding
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before 30
have
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has
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some side effects since
,
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apply
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children are not satisfied
about
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with
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their carrier as well as they can not achieve their dream job in between 30 years.
For example
, due to lack of education
people
got
poor
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a poor
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hike in their job and that’s why they are financially weak before thirty
age
also
they cant borrow needful for their family.
Last
but not least,
the
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another advantage is that
sometime
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sometimes
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child
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children
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are
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is
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not mentally as well as physically prepare
for
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to
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choose
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choosing
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their partner or staying with
partner
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a partner
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so in that
case
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,case
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they face helplessness and severe depression problem.
For example
,
love
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a love
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marriage below 30
age
is still not working for
long
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a long
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time owing to less experience about
people
and due to immaturity poor adjustment as well as understanding between both.
Lastly
, I think marriage is
most
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the most
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important stage
of
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for
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young
people
so don’t force them. Parents give them
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a suggestion
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suggestion
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suggestions
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for
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the wedding
a wedding
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wedding
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weddings
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. but,
final
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the final
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decision is
depend
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to depend
depending
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on
child
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the child
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. And after 30 they are independent to take their own decision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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