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Many people claiming that hopping from one workplace to another is more beneficial than staying in one job for a very long time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, extensive attention has been put on changing
work
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. A number of
people
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 support that there are more advantages
for
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 changing
jobs
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 frequently than just doing
one
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job
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 for many years. I tend to hold the opposite view. In
this
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 essay, I will give some detailed explanations.
First
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 of all, it is beneficial for
people
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 to
work
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 in
one
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 company for a long time rather than changing several
jobs
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 in a short period because
people
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 doing
one
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job
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 for many years tend to develop good
work
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 ethics. They have strong responsibility for their companies and
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society as a whole. They are more likely to try their best to complete their
jobs
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. For those individuals who like to change
jobs
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 regularly, they are not likely to
work
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 hard to accomplish their tasks because they may quit
this
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job
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 and find another
one
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.
Furthermore
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, another advantage of staying in
one
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job
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 is that
people
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 could have less financial pressure because they can earn
stable
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a stable
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 income, which can ensure they have a good quality of life. If a person
change
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changes
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jobs
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 frequently, they cannot guarantee they can make money for the
next
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 month. They would be unemployed during the period of looking for a
job
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, but they still need to pay
life
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living
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 expenses
such
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 as rent, electricity bills and many other payments.
As a result
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, they may face financial pressure. In conclusion, individuals would benefit from staying in
one
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job
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 rather than hopping from
one
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job
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 to another because they can develop good
work
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 ethics
such
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 as responsibility and
face less
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faceless
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 financial pressure due to stable income.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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