Some school leavers tend to go for travelling or work for a period of time before directly going to university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Youngsters are taken a gap to work or travel across the world before embarking on their formal University education.

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gap year in the subsequent paragraphs and with my opinion in the conclusion.

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students

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to explore the world but

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discover their interests. It helps to know

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real life

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situations. A survey conducted by

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Harvard University has revealed that twenty-

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students

drop out who headed straight to the college.Apart from

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, working for a period help them to accumulate the funds which

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to bear the expense of their education which ultimately reduce the financial burden of parents.

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potential

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associatied

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with taking a break. Some

students

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interests

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from studies.

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find it very enjoyable ultimately they shun their studies. To conclude, the break of a year taken before pursuing university studies helps

students

to discover their career

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and

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allows them to consolidate financially.

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it can lead to an end of an academic career .

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Some school leavers tend to go for travelling or work for a period of time before directly going to university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do agree or disagree ?

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

The diagrams represent information in Edmonton about transport and car use.