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Some people believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think that it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #efforts #fight #climate #change
It is undeniable that
climate
condition
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 become worst
day
 by
day
 due to
pollution
 .
people
 are divided on the basis of
climate
condition
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conditions
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. Many
people
aregue
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argue
 that accept the reality and others believe that it is
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to take some steps for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of
environment
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the environment
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.
However
, in
this
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i
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I
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 will discuss both the view and
elaborated
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 in conclusion.
First
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 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
,
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climate
condition
 is
the
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 ongoing process and natural process . If
people
 want to change it that lead to waste of resources and affect the human biorhythm.
people
 should cope up with the
condition
 in summer when there
are
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 hotter
condition
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conditions
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.
Moreover
,
climate
condition
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conditions
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also
affect
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 the
mankid
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mankind
 so if it will
be change
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be changed
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 in
short
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a short
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 time the impact will be worst.The
climate
condition
 run under earth movement so if it will change ut affect the human mankind.
On the other hand
 ,
human
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humans
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 have played
vital
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a vital
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 role in
this
condition
. The temperature of
global
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the global
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incresing
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increasing
day
 by
day
 and it results
into
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melting
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the melting
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 of
glacier
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glaciers
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 and
ozon
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ozone
Ozon
 layer
condition
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conditions
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. The
ozon
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ozone
 layer
depletition
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depletion
 directly affect the rainy season , the rain ratio
decresing
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decreasing
day
 by
day
 .
In addition
, factory
pollution
 and vehicle
pollution
also
 affect the
climate
 . As per the USA report , in
future
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 there will be 60%
less
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fewer
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 chances of
the
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rain , because of the
pollution
.
This
 will directly affect the agriculture business .In conclusion ,
i
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 would like to reiterate that , in my
ponion
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opinion
, those who are less concern about the
climate
 they should learn about its negative effect , but those who are well known about the
condition
 they should take some ideal steps to protect the environment.
Submitted by Harsh prajapati  on

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