Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world. Others feel that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based. Discuss both sides and give your own view.

Several
people
think that it is better for funded organisations to help
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needy
people
globally. whilst,
on the other hand
, individuals say that it
better
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for
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a chartiable
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chartiable
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charitable
organization to help
people
where they reside.
This
essay agrees with the first statement because all
human
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are
same
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the same
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and it is bad to discriminate the humans. On the one hand, many masses argue that caring
organization
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organizations
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should help internationally with no injustice. By
this
the importance of every human will increase and at the same time the demonstration of
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qualities
such
as kindness and caring can be shown. Personally, I believe that if
people
help others in their rough
time
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times
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than
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then
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in future the results could be
same
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for them as well.
For instance
, kalasa aid is known internationally to help
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citizens around the world. When in Bangladesh the disastrous event took place
then
this
organization helped the citizens
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that nation. On the other side, many think that
instead
of helping the refugees from various countries, it is good to take care of individuals who belong to the host country.
According to
them,
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residing in
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nation could be diseaseless and
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not be suffering from the calamitous events that could take place.
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,
this
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deny
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this
statement and believes that everyone should be served equally.
For instance
, Mumbai being a very renowned town suffers from rain each and every year.
Therefore
, khalsa aid supports the residents who
stuck
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in the disaster in that city. In conclusion, if the organizations take steps to support the residents who are being
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in the world
due to
the unknown events
than
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then
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that could be a great thing to do.
However
, numerous
also
comment that it is far better to assist the one in
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nation rather than in
foreign
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. But the first statement works more than the second one.
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