Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is this positive or negative development?

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add online course offers to their portfolio
thus
individuals can continue
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their education
in
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the Internet. In my
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I believe that
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this
is an opportunity for adults who want to improve
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themselves
theirselves
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while they are working and it provides
people
to attend many lessons from well-known
universities
without changing country. But in the meantime, there are some drawbacks
such
as lack of face-to-face interaction and distance-learning may create
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of isolation.
First
and foremost, before the Internet individuals or professionals struggle to attend on-campus
classes
due to their work or other responsibilities
such
as family, kids and household. With the help of
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people
are able to manage their learning process
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their own time and pace.
Secondly
, thanks to
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in online learning many prestigious institutions open their doors for online learners.
For example
, Harvard, MIT, Yale, and many other well-known
universities
now offer online
classes
on specific topics for 6 to 10 weeks. In
this
way
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people
don’t have to change the place or country that they live to take a course from these
universities
.
However
, nobody contest that online learning has some drawbacks
such
as lack of human interaction and
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of community. It is really hard to feel like a part of the university culture while attending the
classes
miles away. It is
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fact that human beings are emotional creatures
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to bond with others. In my
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the most significant disadvantage of online learning is lack of communication
thus
cause
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of isolation in
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period.
However
online
classes
could improve
such
as the help of instructors and
people
can come over
this
feeling with video call meetings between students. In
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I believe that online learning brings many advantages in our lives
however
there is still some room for progress. I personally pleased to know that I am able to attend
classes
from the top
universities
without
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my home or country even if it won't feel like studying
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on-campus.
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  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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