Employer should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experienced when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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, educational qualification has become more valuable in

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well paid

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job

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.In the corporate world, every skill and

qualifications

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regarding academic experience

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valuable.

However

, some people argue that employers should focus on personal qualities than academic performance and experience . I totally disagree with

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viewpoint.

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grade

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should be considered for

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functioning

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system of industries or companies.

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, employees should have enough communication

skill

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and responsibility

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their work .

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example, many industries spreading their business

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all over

world

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so

for

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that employees should have

capacity

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to tackle the condition .

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,

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personal qualities can not be ignored . Having

personal

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skill person

also

run

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good business without any kind of degree. Another point to consider is that

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there are numbers of

field

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the field

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in which experience and education

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very important

such

as nursing, Medicine and political party.

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,

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position required

experienced

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person.

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, in 2015 total

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industries

unit

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were closed up due to

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experienced

experience

exeperienced

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staff .

Moreover

, experienced person

manage

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all the

task

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without disturning the

employers

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services. But there are multinational company those who considered

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all factors of the

empoyees

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employees

.

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may

leads

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to positive growth of the institution and

also

good for the

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work force

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. In conclusion, it can be seen that

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educational

level

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are important in

medical

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field.

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,

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strongly disagree with

this

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fact that personal ability should be focused on

instead

of degrees and achievements during employment.