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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is advisable that
parents
 should be encouraged to take part in parenting
courses
 which are an effective method for their
children
's development. From my perspective, while taking these
courses
 could bring numerous benefits, I would argue that it is better for
parents
 to nurture their
children
 by themselves. Admittedly, there are some reasonable reasons as to why taking parenting
courses
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 many positive consequences.
To begin
 with,
parents
 would have thorough preparations for having a baby.
In other words
,
parents
 are equipped with
ready
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 mentality and
practiced
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 nurturing skills.
Moreover
,
parents
 are more likely to have the right behaviours for each stage of their
children
's development, especially teenagers. A typical example of
this
 is that when a child disobeys or lies,
parents
 will not punish them with physical punishments but will opt for more works or taking
awar
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away
 some privileges.
This
 means that
children
 have to do more
houseworks
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housework
 and their
parents
 could set
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limit
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 to recreation activities or reduce pocket money.
On the other hand
, I am of opinion that taking parenting
courses
 brings more significant detrimental effects.
First
 and foremost, each child will have a unique personality. It means that
parents
 could not apply a particular method for all
children
.
Last
 but not least, many
parents
 have
own
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 experience thanks to raising
first
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children
. To be specific, it is not too difficult for them to take care of the
next
 kids. In conclusion, I believe that it is a good way for
parents
 to nurture their
children
 naturally without taking any parenting
courses
.
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