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Some people believe that studying online is more effective than the campus study . what are the advantages and disadvantages of online learning.

#people #campus #study
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 world,
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online education
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 more popular in every field of
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education. There are numerous advantages and disadvantages of
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upcoming
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 paragraphs. The
first
 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
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 the cost of education will be less and
student
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 can take an opportunity to learn from
any where
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.
Furthermore
 , students do not need to pay for transportations fees
thus
 , they saving a lot of money.
Secondly
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the student
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student
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students
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 can feel
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the comfortable
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 environment
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home
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 and they can log in as per their time schedule.
Moreover
, owing to online classes
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students
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 can show
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 of
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untill
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until
 they
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don't
 get
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 properly . Another most important reason is that , they are
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always
 under parents
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surveillance
 so ,
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also
 beneficial for the parents. A recent
study
 by
Harvard
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university
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 of
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USA
 showed that online
study
 is far more than physical educations.
On the other hand
 , there are
also
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side
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 of online
study
.
firstly
, due to online
study
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 there are chances of the health problems
such
 as red eyes, vision problems .
In addition
 ,
student
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become
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 lazy because they know that they can
acccess
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access
 anytime . Many people argue that in online class students do not learn manners and communications skills so , in
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 it
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 to
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 impact on them. Another most disadvantage is that they do miss
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 to attend the gym , library and school functions. Overall , some people still preferred
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 learning. In conclusion , owing to easy accessibility and learning online learning become more effective day by day . The advantages of online learning outweigh the disadvantages.
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  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • access
  • resources
  • cost-effective
  • affordable
  • diverse
  • global
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivated
  • disciplined
  • personal growth
  • collaborative
  • technical difficulties
  • connectivity
  • disrupt
  • hands-on experience
  • replicate
  • self-motivation
  • proactive
  • challenging
  • distractions
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