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People who were born in rural areas often move to big cities when they become adults. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

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Nowadays migration to urban
areas
 is occurred to be popular among those people who were born in rural
areas
. One of the main reasons for
this
 rural exodus is different levels of economic
development
 in rural and urban
areas
. In my opinion,
this
 tendency has a significant negative effect on the
development
 of not only the rural
areas
 through decreasing population but
also
 cities due to reducing the standard of living among urban communities.
To begin
 with, the root cause of rural migration is that people in the countryside are not able to get all the needed facilities,
such
 as schools, hospitals, business activities, and cultural opportunities.
This
 is because most facilities and services are concentrated in urban centres due to the larger population. And those few services, available in countrysides, do not provide sufficient quality.
As a result
, the already small rural community tends to move to urban
areas
 looking for better opportunities.
For example
, having carried out the poll among the youth generation aiming to move from rural to urban
areas
 in Kazakhstan, researchers mentioned that more than 60% of people living in rural are moving in search of great opportunities that the city may provide. In my opinion, the trend of rural exodus harms the progress of rural
areas
 as it reduces the local community.
As a result
, the shortage of economically active rural population decreases farming activities and boosting the unemployment rate.
Moreover
, on no account should the consequences of the growing urbanization be ignored as it leads to overcrowding in urban centres and is made worse life for city dwellers by the causing social tense.
For example
, urban
areas
 with an intense flow of movers from rural
areas
 are subjected to a higher crime rate due to a lack of appropriate workplaces for newcomers. To conclude, internal migration from rural to urban
areas
 due to the fact of different levels of economic
development
 of these
areas
 leads to a deterioration in the living conditions of urban residents, as well as negatively affects the prospects for the
development
 of the countryside.
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