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The development of modern technology in communication has benefited some people; however, others have had no benefits at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the advent of advanced means of technology in communication , it turned out to be very successful for some masses whereas some opponents did not get any advantage from it at all. I believe it proved to be more beneficial than
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the other

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other
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another

The adjective other appears to be modifying the singular noun way. Consider making a change.

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 way around and will discuss my views in
following
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the following

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 paragraphs. To embark on, with the latest means of interacting with populace nowadays it is much
more
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apply

The double comparative more easier may be repetitive. Consider changing this to the appropriate comparative form.

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easier to communicate with each other and faster than a decade before.
For instance
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 , Skype and WhatsApp applications in our smartphones provide an unbeatable experience in video conferencing and instant message deliveries and that too in seconds. Masses can now do their virtual meetings just by clicking one button away and get connect with each other despite
of
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apply

The preposition of after despite may be unecessary. Consider removing the second preposition.

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long distance
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long-distance

It appears that long distance is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 among them.
Secondly
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, work from home culture is surging nowadays due to
outbreak
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the outbreak

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 of coronavirus pandemic. Many IT professionals are able to work from their dwellings just by clicking on a button.
This
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 helped tremendously the company as well as staff to carry on their work with ease . In summary , I would say that
this
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 advanced technology brought more benefits to
masses
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the masses

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 than the other way around

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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