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The best way to protect the environment is to use local resource, such as food or building materials rather than transporting resources from other places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#environment #resource #food #materials #resources #places
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A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of protection of the environment through the home
resources
instead
 of importing from various foreign nations. To some
extent
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 I am after with the given notion and
this
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further
 with logical explanations. On the one hand, there are
plethora
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 of
products
 and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 that require huge investments to produce or create on
local
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a local
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 level. There are many
countries
those
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 have their unique natural
resources
 and to utilise these materials the
import
 is the only option left for the other
countries
 which are unable to produce these
products
.
For instance
, Arab
countries
 have their own unique natural product
such
 as oil and
rest
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 of the
countries
 can only take the advantage of particular things as an
import
.
Furthermore
,
import
 and export are the primary methods to build strong connections among
countries
.
On the other hand
, protection of the environment requires ample
of
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preventions
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, one of them is
use
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the use
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 of local
resources
 and
products
.
Moreover
, there are enormous of merits of
home grown
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homegrown
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products
 and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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, the most preponderant one is that it will create employment opportunities and will encourage the local companies and factories to produce the essential
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 and materials for the local community.
For example
,
Aasam
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Assam
Adam
 is famous for tea production in India and by the use of these natural
products
 the economy must grow in
term
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terms
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 of local production.
Hence
, there are several other
products
 as well as goods that can be used to enhance the local markets. To conclude, Environmental protection depends on various factors that
needs
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 to be addressed including the use of local
resources
, whereas, there should be
decline
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a decline
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 in the
import
 of unnecessary goods from
the
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other
countries
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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