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Modern cultures around the world have become similar as compared to the past. What are the main reasons for it? Is it a positive or a negative improvement?

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Due to globalization, many cultures and traditions are getting intermixed and turning
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 as compared to old times. There can be many reasons behind
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 development and I think
this
 a positive improvement for masses. To embark on, immigration to the developed nations is on surge nowadays by the students and the youngsters from the developing nations. Advanced nations offer
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 of opportunities and facilities which eventually lead to
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 of different people from all around the world.
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 , Canada is a developed country having
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 of all
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ethnic races and
culture
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cultures
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 but they all exhibit mostly similar customs and traditions due to
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the mixing
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 of
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the population
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population
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 very well.
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 generation nowadays
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 migrating to different places which leads to them forgetting their roots and traditions.
This
 development is a positive development as it is promoting oneness among all cultures and people .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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